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Fiona and Will (RE: theGoddamnBatman's request)
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Gouger
Joined: Tue Sep 28, 2010 11:11 pm Posts: 177 Location: Right behind you
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 Fiona and Will (RE: theGoddamnBatman's request)
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Fri Oct 29, 2010 9:44 pm |
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FSM
Joined: Mon Oct 04, 2010 6:47 pm Posts: 133
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 Re: Fiona and Will (RE: theGoddamnBatman's request)
Hey, I liked it quite a bit. The girl´s lines were weird, to say the least, but I liked most of it. Then again, as I´ve mentioned in plenty of previous times, I love it when the unwilling become the eager.
Really liked the part when he makes her beg to be gagged, really! didin´t like the begging too much. She sounds just really weird, as mentioned.
I´d give it 3 of 5 star =)
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Mon Nov 08, 2010 6:59 am |
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Gouger
Joined: Tue Sep 28, 2010 11:11 pm Posts: 177 Location: Right behind you
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 Re: Fiona and Will (RE: theGoddamnBatman's request)
So you think it's actually good? I know it's no great work and yeah her lines are kind weird but when you're drugged and in a traumatic situation you don't really makes perfect sense...
I just re-read it and I have to admit that, no it isn't half-bad but yeah, it could use some work. If anyone really REALLY wants to hear more of this particular one just say so. If you want it to continue and want something specific to happen like a tentacle monster from the TA story comes in or Will takes her somewhere or whatever, feel free to give a suggestion.
In the mean time I think I'll do some other writing.
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